we need to add directed by... edited by... so were going to put them creatively like we have done with the others
ON THE SQUARE GLASS WINDOW - BECUASE ITS BARE - DIRECTED BY - it will appear once he's down the stairs and walking through the door, it will say "directed by lois Hutchinson" and it will be in a bold yellow font - because that's my colour
WHEN RAHIBS WALKING AWAY SOMETHING WILL COME OUT - EDITED BY - when he gets to the bin it will appear - it will say "edited by charlotte browning" in a hot pink - the same as the beginning
ON THE FLOOR - CAMERA WORK BY - this will be on the floor before rahib walks through. the words will roll away as he walks past - it will say "camera work by charlotte browning" also in hot pink.
WHEN I WALK AWAY THERE WILL BE SOMETHING WRITTEN ON THE GROUND - WRITTEN BY- when the first strip light turns on it makes the floor distinctive so I think that would be a good place to put "written by lois Hutchinson" - again in yellow
PRODUCED BY - EACH OF OUR NAMES WILL BE ON THE STAIRS - it will read as
produced by
"rahib khan
ben angliss
lois Hutchinson
charlotte browning"
because the names get longer as they go down giving a stair effect - also when I step onto the step the name will disperse as it will look visually effective. all of our names will probably be in bright blue because I thought we should have all the primary colours, (we already have red and yellow,) also we have pink and green which are bright colours too so it stands out and attracts the eye.
we have assigned each other colours so its easier to follow - im bright yellow, charlotte is hot pink, ben is red and rahib is green and these will be the same colours that come up when we put our jobs on.







Some good reasons given here for changes made to your initial drafts
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